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Over all Critique needed

I'm mainly focused on anatomy problems but I'm sure the shading could be done much better and the composition looks like it could be done better as well. Any advice and information is appreciated.

Anatomy: There are a couple of isolated problems with the anatomy (e.g. narrow shoulders, short and heavy arm without a clearly defined wrist or elbow), but I think the most important thing to work on is the entire pose. Right now it's doesn't read very well; I'm not sure if he's holding the chair, or if his arms are just dangling down. Or whether he's sitting with a straight back or slumped. Or how the head and the shoulders are positioned. Perhaps finding a good reference photo would help a lot. (And if you like, I could redline it.)

Shading: There are three things you could do to improve the shading. The most important one is to be consistent with your light source. For example, the rear leg of the chair casts a shadow that suggests there's a light source behind the character. The highlight on the arm looks like there's light coming from the side. The rest of the body has only a sliver of shadow, suggesting there's another light source just to the right of the viewer.

Another thing you could do is add more cast shadows. For example, his left leg would cast a shadow on the tail and part of the other leg. Or perhaps his arm would cast one on the chair and on his body. Same thing with his trousers and his feet.

Also, don't be afraid to add more contrast. Some deeper shadows will give the drawing more punch.

Composition: A good rule is not to let your subject touch the edge. So you could either add more room at the bottom, or cut off a good chunk. Another rule is the "rule of thirds"; instead of centering everything, move it to the left or right 1/3rd of the paper. Or to the top or bottom 1/3rd. Also, pay attention to the perspective when placing objects in a scene. The vanishing points of the chair and the room suggest a very high horizon, so the viewer is looking down. This also means the foreshortening of the character will be different (for example you'd have to foreshorten his shins instead of his thighs.)

I hope I could be of help. :)

That's a great help thx. Yeah, I think it's very hard to read what the picture is supposed to be saying too. He was supposed to be slouching on the chair and snoozing. Didn't pull that off too well, and I noticed most of the anatomy issues but just didn't know how to fix them so if you don't mind, a redline would be a great help. I'll keep an eye out for the shadows and am still trying to work out how to lay out the composition for this pic.

One of the things I found a little bit "off" was the perspective. You have a wall just behind him, but there is nothing defining the space to the figure's right side. So it looks like he is squished up between the corner of two walls.

If this is the case, there is no line near the chair to determine where the wall meets the floor. If it is not the case, there needs to be some indication that there is a distance between him and the empty space. Placing a wall/floor line, even subtly, will help in the perspective of the entire piece.

ahh, you're right. I should go and fix that. I agree that perspective is one of the biggest problems in this picture.

Okay, here's a sketch of what I had in mind. I hope it shows what you could do to improve the pose and the anatomy.

ahh, thank you very much. That showed me what I thought was wrong with the head. I didn't show any neck at all so it seemed off. I'll need to fix the other bits of anatomy that I messed up on too. Thanks alot, this helps me so much. ^^